Raichu86
03-03-2005, 12:42 AM
I'm currently developing a cause and effect essay for my English Composition I class. This essay is due in its final form this Monday. I'd not normally ask for this, but there are a couple of factors leading me to do so...
My discussion group for this essay has had nothing useful to say about it.
The instructor was sick this week, so she didn't get to go around giving feedback like she normally would.
Having received so little feedback, I'd like to ask anybody who's bored and would like to give an opinion to do so. Here's what I need to achieve.
This essay is about my weight loss endeavors, so there are a number of effects. The effects being the point of the essay, I'd like to ensure that they are expressed/conveyed clearly enough.
I must ensure there are no grammar or spelling errors that I missed. I don't believe there are any, but if you notice any errors, or even question anything, please bring it to my attention.
The minimum word count is 750 words. I'm well past that, but somebody who read draft 1 said some of the paragraphs are too short. How am I doing now?
Here it is: http://wildbill.purezc.com/collegedocs/Unburthening%20the%20Scale%20-%20Draft%202.rtf
Thanks in advance. :thumbsup:
My discussion group for this essay has had nothing useful to say about it.
The instructor was sick this week, so she didn't get to go around giving feedback like she normally would.
Having received so little feedback, I'd like to ask anybody who's bored and would like to give an opinion to do so. Here's what I need to achieve.
This essay is about my weight loss endeavors, so there are a number of effects. The effects being the point of the essay, I'd like to ensure that they are expressed/conveyed clearly enough.
I must ensure there are no grammar or spelling errors that I missed. I don't believe there are any, but if you notice any errors, or even question anything, please bring it to my attention.
The minimum word count is 750 words. I'm well past that, but somebody who read draft 1 said some of the paragraphs are too short. How am I doing now?
Here it is: http://wildbill.purezc.com/collegedocs/Unburthening%20the%20Scale%20-%20Draft%202.rtf
Thanks in advance. :thumbsup: